The most common feedback I got with this story is people wanted more description. Unfortunately, that’s what I cut in order for this story to remain classified as flash-fiction (<1,000 words). So, when it got rejected by the pro flash-fiction sites, I decided it would be best to flesh the story out before submitting it places where I didn’t need to keep it so short.
In addition to adding back in description and the Spanish phrases I’d cut, I also created more of a character arc for the narrator. It’s what I need to set it apart from other “person discovers paranormal creatures living among humans” stories.
In all, I’m quite pleased with how it turned out. It may only need a minor edit before going back out on submission. I’ll let it sit for a bit before deciding.
- Started February 4
- Finished February 6
- 1,566 words
- 157% the size of v 3.1
- Amount of Spanish: 2 words, 5 phrases
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